Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics]

You did it again, Cody! This poem is great. The emotion feels so raw and heavy, which is exactly what I like to feel when reading poetry like this. The first stanza really stood out to me. I love the first three lines especially. Very intense.

Thanks shannon! BTW my book is officially finished It'll be for sale in a few weeks on amzon!

The Poet Jonah wrote:

Thanks shannon! BTW my book is officially finished It'll be for sale in a few weeks on amzon!

Congratulations! I can't wait to read it!

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

^Wow, thank you so much, Matt! I am honored that you compared my poem to T.S. Eliot's The Waste Land. It had been a while since I read it, so I checked it out again and did see some similarities that I probably never would have thought of on my own.

You have a good voice! I love watching performances where it's obvious that the musicians are having such a great time.

The Waste land? I like that poem. Did you know it inspired a stephen King Novel?

My lyrics are being worked on currently, I have yet to get anything beyond one line.

JimmyB wrote:

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

^Wow, thank you so much, Matt! I am honored that you compared my poem to T.S. Eliot's The Waste Land. It had been a while since I read it, so I checked it out again and did see some similarities that I probably never would have thought of on my own.

You have a good voice! I love watching performances where it's obvious that the musicians are having such a great time.

The Waste land? I like that poem. Did you know it inspired a stephen King Novel?

My lyrics are being worked on currently, I have yet to get anything beyond one line.

I like The Waste Land too. I read a bit of T. S. Eliot in college, but it's been a while. I'm glad I looked it up again. I had no idea it inspired a Stephen King novel. Cool!

Every song has to start somewhere, Jimmy. I'm sure you can create something terrific off of that one line you have. Sometimes I don't even have that when I start a poem. Sometimes it's just a word or an idea. Happy writing!

The Waste Land inspired a Dark Tower novel called The Waste Lands. Very amazing series, on par with Lord of The Rings.

JimmyB wrote:

The Waste Land inspired a Dark Tower novel called The Waste Lands. Very amazing series, on par with Lord of The Rings.

I like Stephen King but I don't like Lord of the Rings. So...I don't know what to make of that statement.

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

JimmyB wrote:

The Waste Land inspired a Dark Tower novel called The Waste Lands. Very amazing series, on par with Lord of The Rings.

I like Stephen King but I don't like Lord of the Rings. So...I don't know what to make of that statement.

It is one of the greatest series of books ever written. It has every Genre in the 7 books.

JimmyB wrote:

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

JimmyB wrote:

The Waste Land inspired a Dark Tower novel called The Waste Lands. Very amazing series, on par with Lord of The Rings.

I like Stephen King but I don't like Lord of the Rings. So...I don't know what to make of that statement.

It is one of the greatest series of books ever written. It has every Genre in the 7 books.

Hmm...I might have to give them a try. Thanks for the tip, Jimmy!

Well, my reading is today. I'm just about as nervous as I've ever been.

Anybody have any last minute public speaking tips?

Jay wrote:

Well, my reading is today. I'm just about as nervous as I've ever been.

Anybody have any last minute public speaking tips?

Good luck, Jay! I don't really have any tips for you (sorry!), but just try to relax and enjoy the experience of presenting your work. Let us know how it goes!

Jay wrote:

Well, my reading is today. I'm just about as nervous as I've ever been.

Anybody have any last minute public speaking tips?

Hmm... I don't know if you're a guitar player, but it always helps me to have a guitar pick in my pocket. Otherwise, you can try a paper clip to sort of "draw your energy" to it. I saw it in a movie once, and thought it was weird, but it's actually a good trick!

Good luck!

Alright Shannon, my book is done and finalized. I'm ordering the proof tomorrow. so I wont be posting anything new here on the forum (I might post some old stuff) but also this:

the roses are dead
the violets are too,
I hated gardening so I didn't water the plants.

No new poems? I'll just have to order your book then!

I hate gardening too! Die plants, die!

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

No new poems? I'll just have to order your book then!

I hate gardening too! Die plants, die!

LOL!!!! YOU'RE GOOFY I had to do some editing with it today and it made it a bit longer (added an introduction) I am so seriously excited about releasing this thing, I mean seriously! Like, getting my proof and then reviewing it OH GOODNESS!

The Poet Jonah wrote:

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

No new poems? I'll just have to order your book then!

I hate gardening too! Die plants, die!

LOL!!!! YOU'RE GOOFY I had to do some editing with it today and it made it a bit longer (added an introduction) I am so seriously excited about releasing this thing, I mean seriously! Like, getting my proof and then reviewing it OH GOODNESS!

Haha, the girls I nanny for say I'm the silliest person in the world. I'm fun!

I can imagine how excited you must be! Hopefully I'll get to experience the feeling of being published in the future too. Make sure you post the release date so I can order your book right away. I am so seriously excited to read this thing. I mean seriously!

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

The Poet Jonah wrote:

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

No new poems? I'll just have to order your book then!

I hate gardening too! Die plants, die!

LOL!!!! YOU'RE GOOFY I had to do some editing with it today and it made it a bit longer (added an introduction) I am so seriously excited about releasing this thing, I mean seriously! Like, getting my proof and then reviewing it OH GOODNESS!

Haha, the girls I nanny for say I'm the silliest person in the world. I'm fun!

I can imagine how excited you must be! Hopefully I'll get to experience the feeling of being published in the future too. Make sure you post the release date so I can order your book right away. I am so seriously excited to read this thing. I mean seriously!

thanks shannon! you're like my biggest/only fan!

The Poet Jonah wrote:

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

The Poet Jonah wrote:

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

No new poems? I'll just have to order your book then!

I hate gardening too! Die plants, die!

LOL!!!! YOU'RE GOOFY I had to do some editing with it today and it made it a bit longer (added an introduction) I am so seriously excited about releasing this thing, I mean seriously! Like, getting my proof and then reviewing it OH GOODNESS!

Haha, the girls I nanny for say I'm the silliest person in the world. I'm fun!

I can imagine how excited you must be! Hopefully I'll get to experience the feeling of being published in the future too. Make sure you post the release date so I can order your book right away. I am so seriously excited to read this thing. I mean seriously!

thanks shannon! you're like my biggest/only fan!

How about this? I'll be the first of many, many fans that you will have. Just wait and see.

I'll have to do a lot of waiting

The Poet Jonah wrote:

I'll have to do a lot of waiting

Like Tom Petty says, "The waiting is the hardest part." It's all part of the literary business, a lesson I am still learning! But with talent like yours, I know it will happen for you. Keep the faith.

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

The Poet Jonah wrote:

I'll have to do a lot of waiting

Like Tom Petty says, "The waiting is the hardest part." It's all part of the literary business, a lesson I am still learning! But with talent like yours, I know it will happen for you. Keep the faith.

goofy goofy girl

The Poet Jonah wrote:

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

The Poet Jonah wrote:

I'll have to do a lot of waiting

Like Tom Petty says, "The waiting is the hardest part." It's all part of the literary business, a lesson I am still learning! But with talent like yours, I know it will happen for you. Keep the faith.

goofy goofy girl

Haha, I have my moments!

Ruined in Seconds

Early morning minutes, time to overthink,
About what happened last night,
you still can hear the echoes in the sink
You met a stranger who gave you everything
Now you’re staring at the mirror,
there’s nothing but an empty expression
You try to look away from the reflection you don’t want to have
Your lips start shaking, the devil starts to laugh

He gave you pain
He marked the stains
He ate your soul
He made you crawl
Your life in his hands
Your life ruined
In seconds

I am working on something with "The Sins of our fathers,They shape our lives" as a line

theBasemen wrote:

Ruined in Seconds

Early morning minutes, time to overthink,
About what happened last night,
you still can hear the echoes in the sink
You met a stranger who gave you everything
Now you’re staring at the mirror,
there’s nothing but an empty expression
You try to look away from the reflection you don’t want to have
Your lips start shaking, the devil starts to laugh

He gave you pain
He marked the stains
He ate your soul
He made you crawl
Your life in his hands
Your life ruined
In seconds

Whoa, this was dark and creepy and a little scary...and I really like it! The line "Your lips start shaking, the devil starts to laugh" is great. Good use of imagery. I also thought "Now you're staring at the mirror, there's nothing but an empty expression" was very strong. So sad, but we've all been there on some level. Thank you for sharing this with us!