Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics]

Also where's that spring poem Ms Shannon!?

The Poet Jonah wrote:

The secret in the poem is false imprisonment, (habeas corpus).

Thanks Shannon, I've got 4 more poems and then this book is finished

I wanted to use a pirate...so I did

Four more to go...that's so great, Cody! I'm really proud of you!

And I loved the false imprisonment/Habeas Corpus connection. That was brilliant!

The Poet Jonah wrote:

Also where's that spring poem Ms Shannon!?

I'm throwing around a few ideas in my head. I won't forget about it! Hopefully I'll have something up by the end of the week.

Expect the lyrics for my new song in here tomorrow.

JimmyB wrote:

Expect the lyrics for my new song in here tomorrow.

Girl Group

I think I’ve fallen in love again
Oh please God help me I don’t think I can take anymore
You’re a fiery siren wailing on the coast
And I want to swim to your shores
And ever since I got your letter
You make me wanna sing like Eddie Vedder
And ever since I got your letter
I’ve been getting the feeling it can’t get any better

Do you know how beautiful you are?
And do you know just how insane you make me feel?
Ruby lips and eyes of blue
It’s like Devil’s Slide’s dividing me and you

Somewhere out on the docks in the dark
I climb the framework and jump out for the mast
Sneak down the steps to sleep
In its rusty hull and dream of you at last
And I would cross the ocean
Just to hear something you said
And I would drive all night
Your name on repeat over and over and over in my head

Do you know how beautiful you are?
(You probably do)
And do you know just how insane you make me feel?
(Well I don’t think so)
Ruby lips and eyes of blue
It’s like Devil’s Slide’s dividing me and you

You’re love’s the only company I keep
Every night a car comes for me while I sleep
It takes me through the avenues
Into the city where I look for your
Ruby lips and eyes of blue
It’s like Devil’s Slide’s dividing me and you

I just wanted to hold you
I just wanted to kiss you
I just wanted to hold you
I just wanted to feel your hands in mine
Take the body away
Just to find my baby
Take the body away
Justify my dream
You take the body away
Just help me find my baby…

You wanted to make a quick escape
I was hoping you would hit me with your car
You wanted to make a quick escape
I was hoping you would hit me with your
Ruby lips and eyes of blue
It’s like Devil’s Slide’s dividing me and you

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^That was a fun song, Matt! Very catchy! Are you the guy singing in the video? If so, it looked like you were having the best time. I especially liked this part:

And ever since I got your letter
You make me wanna sing like Eddie Vedder

I couldn't help but smile when I was listening to this. Good job!

Okay, here's a new poem that I wrote this week in answer to Cody's spring poem challenge. I took some creative liberties with the theme, so it isn't exactly about the season, but spring does play a role in this story. Let me know what you guys think.

Your Endless Summer

Your false endless summer
Shifts with a fierce wind
Leaves tumble from trees
Hinting at eventual bareness

Holding onto the warmth
Of the setting summer sun
Your smile barely falters
As the storms blow in
Threatening to drown us all

From heavy clouds
Your weary soul seeks shelter
While icy rain
Flows through your veins

A ray of sun peeks out
Teasing of an end
To winter,
The coming
Of spring

Fighting to stay warm
You grab for a piece
Of your endless summer
Hoping, praying, begging
That it won't fade away
But you know

You know the clouds
Are rolling in again
The dark, bitter cold
That just won't release
Its hold on you

The winter rages on
Making you fight
With every breath,
For every breath
Strengthening your soul
As your body crumbles

Ashes to ashes
Dust to dust

To everything there is a season
The promise of spring
Gives hope that
This too shall pass

As the sun rises
And the frostbitten pain
Of winter slips away
The storm is finally over

Here comes your true endless summer
Here comes the sun

That's great Shannon!

I think this was my favorite part:

The winter rages on
Making you fight
With every breath,
For every breath
Strengthening your soul
As your body crumbles

Ashes to ashes
Dust to dust

I think you guys have inspired me to do some poetry!

Thanks, Konrad! I appreciate the feedback. This poem is pretty dark and was kind of hard for me to write, so I was a little nervous that it wasn't any good.

You should definitely write some poetry...and then share it with us! I'm so happy that so many people have contributed poems and lyrics to this thread.

Just earned a like on the fb page haha, really loving your stuff!

Yeah... it was kind of dark. But, it was really good.

Ah, I'll have to figure out something to contribute I suppose. I've written a couple songs...not sure if they are any good. But, who knows. haha

TGAforLIFE wrote:

Yeah... it was kind of dark. But, it was really good.

Ah, I'll have to figure out something to contribute I suppose. I've written a couple songs...not sure if they are any good. But, who knows. haha

You should post them!

Thanks for the great feedback!

We'll see, we'll see...

You are most welcome!

Alright... so it's a long story, but my friend had an old '82 Volvo. And I wrote a funny song about it after he sold it:

The Volvo

She made the girls eyes light up
But, the Volvo
Sometimes she wouldn't start up.
She went in the shop a few times,
She cost Sev a few dimes
But, the Volvo
She could make an epic trip

She was a heck of a fighter
She made our days much brighter
Her radio went out one day
But, no it didn't matter...
'Cause the Volvo,
Made every day okay

Her name was Serene
A lean mean fighting machine
She may have had some rust
But for her it was a must
She came down from Alaska
Watch out...
She might just pass ya

Konrad, that was so fun! I bet your friend loved it. I liked the part about her radio going out but it didn't matter. I got this picture in my head of two guys (like Wayne and Garth ) singing their hearts out, with or without the radio on. It's funny how old cars like that can carry so many memories. Thank you for sharing your lyrics!

that was the best thing you have put here. seriously that first line made me smile like a school girl! great stuff shannon

Death of a Town

This place was once a landmark town
Now were lucky if anyone comes around
most of the businesses are closing down
except for the ones burning to the ground.

Have you ever seen the death of a town
Have you ever seen the death of a town
When everything's coming down
Have you ever seen the death of a town

This town was an immigrants dream
Where every man could believe in his steam
and everybody worked as a team

Have you ever seen the death of a town

This town it had it all
Now nothing has survived the fall
The fall from greace
The only thing left are the tracks by the road
Now I am forced to roam

Have you ever seen the death of a town
Have you ever seen the death of a town
When everything you know is coming down
Have you ever seen the death of a town

Alright guys, its time Irish picks the theme. What shall be the challenge Ms Shannon?

Jimmy, I liked Death of a Town. You did a good job capturing the mood in a town that was once thriving with the promise of the American dream and is now all but forgotten. My favorite part is:

The only thing left are the tracks by the road
Now I am forced to roam

That's a good visual. Nice job!

The Poet Jonah wrote:

that was the best thing you have put here. seriously that first line made me smile like a school girl! great stuff shannon

Thanks, Cody! I'm glad you liked it and that it was worth posting.

Okay Dimestore Saints writers, since I have been given the honor of picking the next theme, I will go with childhood. This topic can be incorporated very loosely into your poem or lyrics, or can be the main concept, whatever you want. I can't wait to see if any of you come up with something to fit my theme!

IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:

Konrad, that was so fun! I bet your friend loved it. I liked the part about her radio going out but it didn't matter. I got this picture in my head of two guys (like Wayne and Garth ) singing their hearts out, with or without the radio on. It's funny how old cars like that can carry so many memories. Thank you for sharing your lyrics!

Hey, you're welcome Shannon. Glad you enjoyed it! Yeah, I guess it's a pretty cute little song anyway.

Thanks for the feedback shannon! yeah, that's me singing. And your poem reminded me of the Waste Land by TS Eliot.
TGAforLife sweet story about the volvo, clever and legit.
jimmy, i can see we share a love of Wrecking Ball, love the message of your song.

^Wow, thank you so much, Matt! I am honored that you compared my poem to T.S. Eliot's The Waste Land. It had been a while since I read it, so I checked it out again and did see some similarities that I probably never would have thought of on my own.

You have a good voice! I love watching performances where it's obvious that the musicians are having such a great time.

the childhood challenge!!!

[Said the Ocean to the Clouds]
Your skin devoured me
And traded all my dirty incisions
For a souvenir,
With the sadness in her voice
Headed for the sleeping trains
Of my childhood
She became like
A big city’s view of the ocean.

And now she reminds me
Of my father’s revolver
Talking to a sigh;
A humble vessel
Stuck in its own
Clamoring despair.

You are loosed from my
Dark hearted
Stormy strung
Unfinished
Love.

You can have me now.