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The Poet Jonah Wooderson
Posts : 418 Join date : 2011-10-24 Age : 33 Location : Chattanooga, the cousin nobody invites to the family reunion
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Tue Mar 27, 2012 11:02 pm | |
| - DeathoftheCool wrote:
- That poem was super interesting. I loved the part about the bird, that was really creative. the splitting of the lines like you did was a cool touch too. Makes it seem more fragmented, like a bunch of snapshots. Sounds like things weren't working out
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IrishNameAndAnInjury The Navesink Banks
Posts : 13514 Join date : 2011-09-16 Age : 41 Location : Spokane Valley, WA
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Tue Mar 27, 2012 11:04 pm | |
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DeathoftheCool The Navesink Banks
Posts : 1953 Join date : 2010-07-26 Age : 29 Location : The Dreaded Barbary Coast
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Tue Mar 27, 2012 11:06 pm | |
| "My heart is set for you, Leaving Penn Station On the 6:13 to Babylon." I love that sig man. What's it from? | |
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The Poet Jonah Wooderson
Posts : 418 Join date : 2011-10-24 Age : 33 Location : Chattanooga, the cousin nobody invites to the family reunion
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Tue Mar 27, 2012 11:14 pm | |
| - DeathoftheCool wrote:
- "My heart is set for you,
Leaving Penn Station On the 6:13 to Babylon." I love that sig man. What's it from? it's something i wrote referencing the same relationship. the 6:13 to Babylon was a train that left penn station in 1950 and collided with another train that was stopped and killed 79 people. | |
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The Poet Jonah Wooderson
Posts : 418 Join date : 2011-10-24 Age : 33 Location : Chattanooga, the cousin nobody invites to the family reunion
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DeathoftheCool The Navesink Banks
Posts : 1953 Join date : 2010-07-26 Age : 29 Location : The Dreaded Barbary Coast
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Tue Mar 27, 2012 11:19 pm | |
| - The Poet Jonah wrote:
- DeathoftheCool wrote:
- "My heart is set for you,
Leaving Penn Station On the 6:13 to Babylon." I love that sig man. What's it from? it's something i wrote referencing the same relationship. the 6:13 to Babylon was a train that left penn station in 1950 and collided with another train that was stopped and killed 79 people. this thread is getting so dark! i love that historical stuff though, it's a really great metaphor, probably one of my favorite things you've written. it also sounds like going to a fantasy land or something, without the historical context. either way it's a very powerful cpl of lines | |
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The Poet Jonah Wooderson
Posts : 418 Join date : 2011-10-24 Age : 33 Location : Chattanooga, the cousin nobody invites to the family reunion
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Tue Mar 27, 2012 11:21 pm | |
| - DeathoftheCool wrote:
- The Poet Jonah wrote:
- DeathoftheCool wrote:
- "My heart is set for you,
Leaving Penn Station On the 6:13 to Babylon." I love that sig man. What's it from? it's something i wrote referencing the same relationship. the 6:13 to Babylon was a train that left penn station in 1950 and collided with another train that was stopped and killed 79 people. this thread is getting so dark! i love that historical stuff though, it's a really great metaphor, probably one of my favorite things you've written. it also sounds like going to a fantasy land or something, without the historical context. either way it's a very powerful cpl of lines I'll post something happy to brighten the mood! | |
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The Poet Jonah Wooderson
Posts : 418 Join date : 2011-10-24 Age : 33 Location : Chattanooga, the cousin nobody invites to the family reunion
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Tue Mar 27, 2012 11:26 pm | |
| [something happy] Down by the creek I sit at the base of a tree, The bluebirds sing me to sleep And I dream of you.
Let’s move away to a tree In the meadows Far away from this place We can’t call our home.
It’ll rain only when We want it to, Just me and you Forever.
The sun found me on my side, I laid motionless for hours And thought of your eyes, Those beautiful eyes.
The bluebirds sang all morning long, The bluebirds sang all morning long.
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| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Tue Mar 27, 2012 11:47 pm | |
| Honestly, though, Cody, your poetry is beautiful. I wish my stuff was as good. |
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The Poet Jonah Wooderson
Posts : 418 Join date : 2011-10-24 Age : 33 Location : Chattanooga, the cousin nobody invites to the family reunion
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Wed Mar 28, 2012 12:07 am | |
| - redskynight wrote:
- Honestly, though, Cody, your poetry is beautiful. I wish my stuff was as good.
thank you so much, it's one of the only positives in my life besides God. the best part about both of those is that they mean the world to me, so the fact that my poetry is actually good makes waking up worth while. God's the reason I'm able to get out of bed, poetry's the reason I stay awake. not to be preachy <----for some reason it reminds me of a preacher, also this just kidding. | |
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IrishNameAndAnInjury The Navesink Banks
Posts : 13514 Join date : 2011-09-16 Age : 41 Location : Spokane Valley, WA
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Wed Mar 28, 2012 7:14 am | |
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- God's the reason I'm able to get out of bed,
poetry's the reason I stay awake Well said, Cody. | |
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The Poet Jonah Wooderson
Posts : 418 Join date : 2011-10-24 Age : 33 Location : Chattanooga, the cousin nobody invites to the family reunion
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Fri Mar 30, 2012 2:58 pm | |
| alright well?! no more poems from you guys??? c'mon! | |
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The Poet Jonah Wooderson
Posts : 418 Join date : 2011-10-24 Age : 33 Location : Chattanooga, the cousin nobody invites to the family reunion
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Fri Mar 30, 2012 3:03 pm | |
| how bout this, it's spring I wanna see some spring poems! | |
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IrishNameAndAnInjury The Navesink Banks
Posts : 13514 Join date : 2011-09-16 Age : 41 Location : Spokane Valley, WA
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Fri Mar 30, 2012 4:04 pm | |
| Oh man, spring poems? That's going to be tough, but I never back down from a challenge. I'll have to start working on something! | |
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The Poet Jonah Wooderson
Posts : 418 Join date : 2011-10-24 Age : 33 Location : Chattanooga, the cousin nobody invites to the family reunion
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Fri Mar 30, 2012 6:13 pm | |
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| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Fri Mar 30, 2012 6:15 pm | |
| This is something that I wrote for my poetry class last semester.
Logic Didn’t you think that I would figure it out? Sure, you said life was a game of numbers; everything went to statistics and probability and chance. That is not everything. What you know – what you believe and choose to know – it’s not it. And that is the thing: you are so set in your beliefs that when an ounce of doubt sets in, you reason with it. You refuse to just let things be. You have to make the doubt be a probable, a statistic, a chance; “it’s all logic,” you always said. But it’s not. The world doesn’t work that way. I’m telling you this now so that reality doesn’t hit you when you least expect it. Because I know your world will shatter when that truck called reality tells you that everything you know is a lie. You need to understand that things happen, and sometimes, you can’t do anything about it.
You don’t have all the answers.
What you don’t have, you don’t need anymore. |
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IrishNameAndAnInjury The Navesink Banks
Posts : 13514 Join date : 2011-09-16 Age : 41 Location : Spokane Valley, WA
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Fri Mar 30, 2012 11:46 pm | |
| - The Poet Jonah wrote:
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A period?! That's all you're giving us, Cody, a measly little punctuation mark? Oh well, I'll just enjoy your signature then. | |
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IrishNameAndAnInjury The Navesink Banks
Posts : 13514 Join date : 2011-09-16 Age : 41 Location : Spokane Valley, WA
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Fri Mar 30, 2012 11:55 pm | |
| - redskynight wrote:
- This is something that I wrote for my poetry class last semester.
Logic Didn’t you think that I would figure it out? Sure, you said life was a game of numbers; everything went to statistics and probability and chance. That is not everything. What you know – what you believe and choose to know – it’s not it. And that is the thing: you are so set in your beliefs that when an ounce of doubt sets in, you reason with it. You refuse to just let things be. You have to make the doubt be a probable, a statistic, a chance; “it’s all logic,” you always said. But it’s not. The world doesn’t work that way. I’m telling you this now so that reality doesn’t hit you when you least expect it. Because I know your world will shatter when that truck called reality tells you that everything you know is a lie. You need to understand that things happen, and sometimes, you can’t do anything about it.
You don’t have all the answers.
What you don’t have, you don’t need anymore. This is really good, Mac! Was the last line inspired by Stay Lucky? The emotion really came through in this poem, even though you were talking about logic, numbers, statistics, etc. My favorite part was the line "You don't have all the answers." That's something I struggle with, because I feel like I'm the one who is supposed to help everybody and know everything, so it's a tough reality for me to face, that I don't always know what to do or have the right answer at the right moment. I think I will be reading this poem a lot in the coming months as I work through some stuff. Thank you for sharing this! | |
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| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Sun Apr 01, 2012 2:57 am | |
| - IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:
- redskynight wrote:
- This is something that I wrote for my poetry class last semester.
Logic Didn’t you think that I would figure it out? Sure, you said life was a game of numbers; everything went to statistics and probability and chance. That is not everything. What you know – what you believe and choose to know – it’s not it. And that is the thing: you are so set in your beliefs that when an ounce of doubt sets in, you reason with it. You refuse to just let things be. You have to make the doubt be a probable, a statistic, a chance; “it’s all logic,” you always said. But it’s not. The world doesn’t work that way. I’m telling you this now so that reality doesn’t hit you when you least expect it. Because I know your world will shatter when that truck called reality tells you that everything you know is a lie. You need to understand that things happen, and sometimes, you can’t do anything about it.
You don’t have all the answers.
What you don’t have, you don’t need anymore. This is really good, Mac! Was the last line inspired by Stay Lucky?
The emotion really came through in this poem, even though you were talking about logic, numbers, statistics, etc. My favorite part was the line "You don't have all the answers." That's something I struggle with, because I feel like I'm the one who is supposed to help everybody and know everything, so it's a tough reality for me to face, that I don't always know what to do or have the right answer at the right moment. I think I will be reading this poem a lot in the coming months as I work through some stuff.
Thank you for sharing this! Yep! One of the things I've been experimenting with is called found poetry and I'm kind of like Brian where I just incorporate things that my heroes wrote into my own things. Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! I'm always so nervous about sharing my writing, thinking that it's not good enough. |
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The Poet Jonah Wooderson
Posts : 418 Join date : 2011-10-24 Age : 33 Location : Chattanooga, the cousin nobody invites to the family reunion
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Mon Apr 02, 2012 2:13 pm | |
| - redskynight wrote:
- IrishNameAndAnInjury wrote:
- redskynight wrote:
- This is something that I wrote for my poetry class last semester.
Logic Didn’t you think that I would figure it out? Sure, you said life was a game of numbers; everything went to statistics and probability and chance. That is not everything. What you know – what you believe and choose to know – it’s not it. And that is the thing: you are so set in your beliefs that when an ounce of doubt sets in, you reason with it. You refuse to just let things be. You have to make the doubt be a probable, a statistic, a chance; “it’s all logic,” you always said. But it’s not. The world doesn’t work that way. I’m telling you this now so that reality doesn’t hit you when you least expect it. Because I know your world will shatter when that truck called reality tells you that everything you know is a lie. You need to understand that things happen, and sometimes, you can’t do anything about it.
You don’t have all the answers.
What you don’t have, you don’t need anymore. This is really good, Mac! Was the last line inspired by Stay Lucky?
The emotion really came through in this poem, even though you were talking about logic, numbers, statistics, etc. My favorite part was the line "You don't have all the answers." That's something I struggle with, because I feel like I'm the one who is supposed to help everybody and know everything, so it's a tough reality for me to face, that I don't always know what to do or have the right answer at the right moment. I think I will be reading this poem a lot in the coming months as I work through some stuff.
Thank you for sharing this! Yep! One of the things I've been experimenting with is called found poetry and I'm kind of like Brian where I just incorporate things that my heroes wrote into my own things.
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! I'm always so nervous about sharing my writing, thinking that it's not good enough. This poem was so angry! I loved it! | |
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The Poet Jonah Wooderson
Posts : 418 Join date : 2011-10-24 Age : 33 Location : Chattanooga, the cousin nobody invites to the family reunion
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Mon Apr 02, 2012 6:41 pm | |
| [A Letter to Prison] My little brother Sits on the cot And stares at The window, He spends his Days wishing The bars were Stained-glass
While I spend Them outside Pleading for A writ of Habeas corpus.
He doesn’t let me See the tears On his cheek, He just sits there Talking about the Color of the walls.
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IrishNameAndAnInjury The Navesink Banks
Posts : 13514 Join date : 2011-09-16 Age : 41 Location : Spokane Valley, WA
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Mon Apr 02, 2012 6:56 pm | |
| Cody, why do you always make me cry? You have a way with words that make the emotions come through so powerfully. What an amazing gift. I really appreciate the raw honesty of this one. There were a couple of parts of this poem that really stood out to me. He spends his Days wishing The bars were Stained-glassI like this imagery. Stained-glass makes me think of church, which makes me think of salvation from all the bad that permeates the earth. Pleading for A writ of Habeas Corpus. Very well said. Thank you for sharing this poem. | |
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The Poet Jonah Wooderson
Posts : 418 Join date : 2011-10-24 Age : 33 Location : Chattanooga, the cousin nobody invites to the family reunion
| Subject: Re: Creative Writing [was: Poetry & Lyrics] Mon Apr 02, 2012 10:41 pm | |
| The secret in the poem is false imprisonment, (habeas corpus). Thanks Shannon, I've got 4 more poems and then this book is finished I wanted to use a pirate...so I did | |
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