Your music! (any and all types are welcome)

So, how do those lyrics sound for a first draft?

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Never hitting the bars or the club sene

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Can I buy you a drink, make it drinks for two
They know me here, I'm a regular
I always stop by, so they say I'm right

These two kinda seem to conflict a little bit.

Harbortown wrote:

Quote :

Never hitting the bars or the club sene

Quote :

Can I buy you a drink, make it drinks for two
They know me here, I'm a regular
I always stop by, so they say I'm right

These two kinda seem to conflict a little bit.

It's a progression like in a story.  The first verse is how the main character was before he saw the girl, and how he's changing and growing out of his shell.

Harbortown wrote:

Quote :

Never hitting the bars or the club sene

Quote :

Can I buy you a drink, make it drinks for two
They know me here, I'm a regular
I always stop by, so they say I'm right

These two kinda seem to conflict a little bit.

This was actually the first thing I thought when reading them over.

I'm not sure what songs you're referring to in the chorus.

I think it's interesting but I'm not sure the character's actions/feelings match up. Tell us more about the character that validates how he feels, I think that could really bring empathy to him which would make it connect.

(Obviously these are just my own biased opinions and have absolutely no critical merit or anything, just some thoughts!)

JimmyB wrote:

Harbortown wrote:

Quote :

Never hitting the bars or the club sene

Quote :

Can I buy you a drink, make it drinks for two
They know me here, I'm a regular
I always stop by, so they say I'm right

These two kinda seem to conflict a little bit.

It's a progression like in a story.  The first verse is how the main character was before he saw the girl, and how he's  changing and growing out of his shell.

Yeah but literally overnight you turn into a regular at a bar? That doesn't really make much sense. It looks less like a progression and more like a plot hole.

Would you rewrite the first verse or add another?

Got our first demo up online

https://soundcloud.com/mudemusic/poetsand-prophits-demo

TheMagnificentDreamer wrote:

Got our first demo up online

https://soundcloud.com/mudemusic/poetsand-prophits-demo

I like this tune. Keep it up. The vocalist in particular has some interesting stuff going on. Everyone is carrying their weight but he definitely holds my interest throughout the song.

Just recorded a rough draft of this song that I'm working on. I'm working in kind of a different way than I normally do, in that there's not really a traditional intro-verse-chorus arrangement but rather it's just...verses and non-verses. Like a traditional folk song I guess.

Anyway here's the (again: unfinished) song if you wanna take a listen and tell me what you think, do give constructive criticism if you see it fit:
https://soundcloud.com/deirenza/song-draft

I like it I really do. Let us know when you get the "finished" one up. Then again, I love the "rough Garage sound".

This makes think a lot of a song, I don't know wich one anymore... maybe society of Eddie Vedder... a mix of that and Lady in black from Uriah Heep for the aaaahaaaa (don't take it bad I love those two songs). I like it a lot.

Love those synths shining through at the end, John. Your delivery definitely seems to be the strongest aspect of your music, and I think this would sound really cool in a full band arrangement.

WOW! it's really good, I like it,  you've a good voice

Harbortown, you talented bastard. Seriously, you do have the incredibly rare gift of just having an unmistakably engrossing vocal tone. Regardless of what you sing I will pay attention. And you're good at the other stuff, so you don't even need to rely on it.

Continue posting stuff and I will listen every time.

JimmyB wrote:

I like it  I really do.  Let us know when you get the "finished" one up.  Then again, I love the "rough Garage sound".

Thanks a lot man. Yeah I don't actually mind the simpler production, I think in the end what matters the most is that the song is good.

HolyBreakOfDay wrote:

This makes think a lot of a song, I don't know wich one anymore... maybe society of Eddie Vedder... a mix of that and Lady in black from Uriah Heep for the aaaahaaaa (don't take it bad I love those two songs). I like it a lot.

Yeah I definitely wanted to get kind of a Society feeling for this song, I've actually tried to achieve that pretty much since when I started writing acoustic songs but I think I hit the spot this time.

DeathoftheCool wrote:

Love those synths shining through at the end, John. Your delivery definitely seems to be the strongest aspect of your music, and I think this would sound really cool in a full band arrangement.

Actually they're guitars! I just put an echo effect on them and cranked it the fuck up. I can't really imagine the song being played with a full band though, like what kinda style do you reckon it would best be performed in?

Anya_TGA wrote:

WOW! it's really good, I like it, you've a good voice

Thank you

Jack wrote:

Harbortown, you talented bastard. Seriously, you do have the incredibly rare gift of just having an unmistakably engrossing vocal tone. Regardless of what you sing I will pay attention. And you're good at the other stuff, so you don't even need to rely on it.

Continue posting stuff and I will listen every time.

Wow, that's just...incredibly humbling, thank you very much.

I got a video my brother made of a band we played in The Knuckle Downs. We wanted to redo the track as its quite flat at times but we never got the chance. The band is finished now but if anyone wants a look here's the link any feedback or criticism would be appreciated (but be gentle haha) Thaks everyone

https://youtu.be/Av9o6InF4Go

Quick cover of "Learnin' to Fly"by Tom Petty

https://www.facebook.com/photo.php?v=734003003292126&l=6733670139641815441

https://soundcloud.com/guitarjimmy/before-we-grow-old There we Go. First original I uploaded to SoundCloud.

JimmyB wrote:

https://soundcloud.com/guitarjimmy/before-we-grow-old  There we Go.  First original I uploaded to SoundCloud.

You're going to ruin your guitar if you keep playing underwater. Cool song though.

ThereIsAThunder wrote:

JimmyB wrote:

https://soundcloud.com/guitarjimmy/before-we-grow-old  There we Go.  First original I uploaded to SoundCloud.

You're going to ruin your guitar if you keep playing underwater. Cool song though.

I don't have a mixing board, so I had to use the computer mic for it...and I don't have to money to buy the USB to hook up my shure mic.

JimmyB wrote:

ThereIsAThunder wrote:

JimmyB wrote:

https://soundcloud.com/guitarjimmy/before-we-grow-old  There we Go.  First original I uploaded to SoundCloud.

You're going to ruin your guitar if you keep playing underwater. Cool song though.

I don't have a mixing board, so I had to use the computer mic for it...and I don't have to money to buy the USB to hook up my shure mic.

Fair enough. Keep writing man.

Jimmy, question: does your speaking voice have the same tone as your singing voice?

Jack wrote:

Jimmy, question: does your speaking voice have the same tone as your singing voice?

I've been fighting a bit of phlegm in my throat.  So yeah it gets a bit scratchy.  But yeah, I have a bit of the same kind of singing voice. Why, is my singing voice that bad?

what are the lyrics to this one?

im jealous of your twelve string, jimmy